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We were directly opposed,
circling each other in a confining pool,
my mouth seeking yours, but only finding
the fragments of composure you left in your wake.

"Nunc scio quid sit Amor",
you said once, and I agreed with you,
then looked up what the hell you meant
as soon as I was alone.

We went stargazing when we were hungry
and fed ourselves with the names
and the glow of all the stars
that spread themselves out to tease us.

"This is what I see in you," you flattered,
pointing at the sky while the wetness of the grass
soaked into our backs.

"You're that string of pearls, right there,
hanging around the neck of the sky.
You are more than what I’ve been looking for,
more than anything I've ever tried to find,"
you painted stars and lies.

I left you job listings in the mornings,
and you told me my fortune,
in the bottom of my teacup.

We were directly opposed; I told you to leave if you wanted,
so on a night too cold for me to see the comfort in your dreams,
you left, gathering your gadgets and souvenirs.

I couldn't find the taste of ginseng pleasant,
nor read the words of dusty geniuses
whom you'd left lying on my shelves.
Pegasus was lost without you,
with the dull rope of Pisces beneath her wing;

I was alone, so I searched for you
finding clues in the faintest signs of you.
When I found you with a bag of broken clocks
and no grasp of reality, I loved you.
I told you, "Amor sempiternus,"
and you couldn’t respond.
Written for =Sammur-amat's contest, Written in the Stars. :love:

My zodiac sign is Pisces, and I worked the constellations in throughout, and more specifically when she can't find Pisces by herself. The first stanza references the two fishes of Pisces, following each other. The beginning symbolism of Pisces finds early roots in Ancient Egypt, and flows into Greek mythology, and then on into modern astrology. The nature of the lovers in the poem and their connection is connected to the fishes, and their aspects in the modern Western zodiac.

The quality of Pisces is mutability, and I pulled a lot of information about the sign from this article on Pisces to define the behaviors and the relationship of the people in the poem. Because Pisces is ruled by Neptune and associated with spiritual journeys and emotionality, I tried to give their relationship and an ebb and flow of the tides connected to the sign.

"The fish are usually portrayed swimming in opposite directions; this represents the duality within the Piscean nature."
"According to 20th century astrologer Robert Hand, the fish facing upwards away from the ecliptic is swimming towards the heavens, or is seeking spiritual illumination. The other fish swims along the ecliptic, concerning itself with material matters." [wikipedia.org]

Latin phrases I used:
"Nunc scio quid sit Amor", meaning "Now I know what love is". Attributed to Virgil.
"Amor sempiternus", meaning "Love eternal", or "Love lives eternal/forever".

Edit: My mom is officially amazing. She went through this with me, line by line, to help me polish it up for the contest. :heart:

Edit: A DD?!! So unexpected and wonderful, thank you so much to ^Beccalicious for featuring this! :heart: 
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WishfulDandelion Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
*-* I love this so much..
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:iconintelligentzombie:
IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :love:
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:iconwishfuldandelion:
WishfulDandelion Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh ^//^; You're welcome
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NanaThatha Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Student General Artist
such good depth
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:iconintelligentzombie:
IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :D
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PurpleChaos Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013
beutiful- broken clocks and all
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:iconintelligentzombie:
IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! :love:
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lollirotcat Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013  Student Writer
Congrats on the DD!! I really love this poem! :D
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IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! :heart:
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lollirotcat Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome!! :)
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eembuc1000 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Did you win the contest? I think you should, automatically, after winning a DD. XD Your poetry is really beautiful; I really enjoyed reading this. :D
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IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! :heart: The contest results actually aren't out yet, so I can still cross my fingers. :eager: The contest ended up getting nearly sixty submissions, and they're all really gorgeous. :faint: I'm just happy it got me writing. :D

Thank you again! :happybounce:
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eembuc1000 Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, good luck with the contest! I'm sure you'll win, though. :)

You're welcome! :hug:
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IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks! :D :hug:
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eembuc1000 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug:
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snicker1 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013
In a romance book I proofread once, an author described a love scene (during the ecstatic convulsions part) and wrote that it was like two universes colliding -- not  terribly intelligent, and yet...and yet... Except your universes are too far away to collide, rather slip by each other. That is how I understood your poem. Especially I liked circling each other in a confining pool. And yes, well done.
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IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much for this comment! It's a lovely interpretation, thank you! :heart: :tighthug:
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! :love: :tighthug:
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aprilwednesday Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013   Writer
so beautiful. i love that title :love:
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:iconintelligentzombie:
IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! :heart:
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Wordeea Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
so well deserved. this is gorgeous
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IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :heart:
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pomohippie7 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013   Writer
A very, very well deserved DD. Congratulations! :clap:
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IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! :happybounce: :D
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Euxiom Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013
:la: Nice work!
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IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks! :D
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Amenarae Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, this is...
Wow...

I can't even tell you how much that took my breath away... You are an amazing writer...
Thank you for posting this.
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IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much, you're too kind! :blush: :tighthug:
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joe-wright Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013   General Artist
Congratulations on the DD! =D
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IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :tighthug: :happybounce:
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AquaGalaxy Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013
congratulations on the DD! c:
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IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :heart:
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cality Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on your DD, Kelsey! :tighthug:
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IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! :tighthug: :love:
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farand Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013
This is wonderful! :o
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IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! :D
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farand Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013
Thank you for uploading. :hug:
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mizzmint Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on having your piece featured as one of today's Daily Deviations! Glomp!

Well deserved Heart
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:iconintelligentzombie:
IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! :hug: :heart:
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mizzmint Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're very welcome :hug:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD! :dalove: Have a nice day! :heart:
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IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :heart: The same to you! :rose:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    My pleasure, thank you :happybounce:
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TehAngelsCry Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013  Professional Interface Designer
I love the transition in this, and the story it quite clearly tells.

Congratulations on your DD! :squee:
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IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! :heart:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013
Jumpin' On the Bed  A wonderful effort for Dee's competition, Kelsey!
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IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :heart: :la:
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:iconcality:
cality Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is a wonderful poem! From the first two lines I instantly felt the Pisces connection. :clap:

Good luck for the contest! :heart:
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IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much, you're too sweet! :meow: :love:
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