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Sudden Wings- NaPoWriMo day 3

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If you had a pair of butterfly wings
(lets not ask ourselves how
or begin to debate
the possibility of such a thing)
but lets say you had a pair
of butterfly wings
which suddenly burst
out from your back
with violent aplomb
and spread themselves out
shaking, wet, and shivering
translucent and captivating
cruelly capturing each
and every single
little diamond fracture of light
would you run to the nearest edge
of some height
and fling yourself away
[to try them out, of course]
or would you be tempted
by fear, by pain, by horror
to reach back and feel
their slippery, smooth texture
to run your hands along
their quivering surface
and rip them out?
Alright, I like this one a little more then what I've been coming up with today. NaPoWriMo day three.
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xEmmyx545x's avatar
This poem has captivating imagery, While reading, I could vividly picture the details you explained.  I love how the beginning is filled with curiosity and innocence, while the last few  line adds a harsher tone.  This contrast made it very interesting and I started to think to myself, "What I do if I had those wings?" It really makes you stop and think. :D 

The only issue I had was with how the poem was formatted, I felt the broken lines distracted me a bit while reading and broke some of the flow.  But overall your rich imagery and contrast in mood is what makes this shine! :)

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